Tuesday, November 12, 2024

COMIC SCRIPT: The only girl for millions of miles

NOTES:

  • Inspired by this one scene here: https://youtu.be/pNmugxejn_U?t=892
  • Also, because this is a script intended for a comic, you'll notice some weird things in there such as mentions of thought clouds
  • Also, I just wanted to include my designs for the girls from Menahat in a comic so yeah

EXT - GREAT DESERT - DAY

Sitting on the sand, Rallen and Jeena are taking a break from walking around the desert. Rallen sips a bottle of water and Jeena watches Komainu dig in the sand. Jeena looks a little blue. 

Close by, Neal runs back with a strange notebook. Zig, Beht and Gorrik stalk him from not too far away.

NEAL: Rallen! Jeena! You gotta check out what I just found! It could be an ancient artefact!

RALLEN: Whoa! 

Rallen checks out the notebook in Neal's hands. Jeena remains seated. 

JEENA: Oh y-yeah, that's pretty interesting...!

NEAL: Right?!

Rallen looks back at Jeena.

RALLEN: ... Hold on, Neal. Wait a sec.

NEAL: Okay! I'll be right here, then!

Rallen jogs up to Jeena and sits down with her. 

RALLEN: Hey Jeena, you seem a bit down... (In his thoughts,) Which is incredibly unusual. (Aloud,) What's up?

JEENA: *Sigh* You wouldn't get it.

RALLEN: C'mon, we're partners -- best friends. You can tell me anything. 

JEENA: Okay, well... It's just that, especially since leaving Doldogo, I've been feeling - I dunno - a little lonely.

RALLEN: Lonely?

JEENA: Yeah. I know it doesn't really matter, but... It's kinda weird knowing I've been probably the only girl around for millions of miles. Since then, I've just been reminded of how much I miss some of our friends back at Kollin.

RALLEN: Ohhh... I see. 

NEAL: (Offscreen) WAAAHH!!!

RALLEN: (To Jeena) Hmm, how about once this Menahat stuff is all over, we can head back to Doldogo? We can totally catch up with Salia again, y'know? 

JEENA: I suppose... But it's just... Don't get weird about this, okay? But... *Sigh* I kinda wish you guys were girls.

RALLEN: Oh what?

An imagination cloud, delving into Rallen's mind. He imagines himself and Neal as if they were women, hanging out with Jeena in the desert.

RALLEN: Hm... That's an interesting thought.

A foreign imagination cloud intrudes Rallen's. From that cloud, three shady-looking women - versions of Zig, Beht, and Gorrik - attempt to kidnap Neal. A female version of Dyrus villainously laughs at their success.

GORRIK: Yeah, that IS interesting!

The imagination clouds disappear. Zig, Beht and Gorrik, currently constrain Neal in attempts to kidnap him. 

ZIG: I think they heard ya, you moron!

Ralland and Jeena look at Neal, Zig, Beht and Gorrik.

RALLEN/JEENA: What the--

BEHT: (To Zig) Sheesh, you guys should at least whisper!

ZIG: If yer gonna tell me that, you do it too, goddammit!

Rallen face-palms.

RALLEN: Yeah, why am I not surprised?!

-- Short Aftermath --

Zig, Beht and Gorrik, constrain Neal. Rallen and Jeena confront them. 

JEENA: You guys better let go of Neal right now!

RALLEN: If you dare hurt him, you'll all be sorry! 

ZIG: Hey now, you better watch it, punks! You ain't even got the full story.

JEENA: Huh?

BEHT: This skinny bozo stole Gorrik's diary. 

GORRIK: I'm totally upset! Down in the dumps! I didn't know this explorer guy could be so mean and heartless!

JEENA: Clearly this is all a misunderstanding. Neal wouldn't go as low as petty theft.

ZIG: Uhuh, sure. Ya know well about nothin' about this fool.

NEAL: N-No, she's right! If you want, I'll give it back if you just let me grab it from my backpack...

BEHT: Whatever ya say, explorer!

Beht chucks Neal his backpack, and Neal takes out the diary, handing it to Gorrik.

GORRIK: Oh! That was easy.

Zig, Beht and Gorrik let Neal go.

ZIG: (Retorting) Ain't that kinda disappointing...

No comments:

Post a Comment